The graph shows the hours spent in different study methods during a two year course

The graph shows the hours spent in different study methods during a two year course
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The graph gives information about the amount of
hours
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spent on each
method
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in two years.
It is clear that
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lectures and classes
was
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were
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most popular from the total in
second
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the second
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year
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in
first
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the first
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semester
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(7
hours
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). But for a
Linking Words
while
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,while
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this
Linking Words
time
was decrease
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was decreased
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to 5
hours
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in 2
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year
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years
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of 2
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semester
Change to a plural noun
semesters
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.
While
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library study
method
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was in 1
year
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of 1
semester
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with 4
hours
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increased
thier
Correct your spelling
their
top
in
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to
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8
hours
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and ended with 6
hours
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in 2
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year
Change to a plural noun
years
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2
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semester
Fix the agreement mistake
semesters
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. Applying the contrast, the most unpopular
from
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of
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the total internet study methods in 1
year
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1
semester
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has surged gradually to 11
hours
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in
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at
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the end of the time period.
Whereas
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library
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the library
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method
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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decreast
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decreased
decrease
from the top
almost
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by almost
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2
hours
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.
According to
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the ,figure we can see that
internet
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the internet
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study
method
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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decreased gradually,
however
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most popular
method
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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decreased
in
Change the preposition
at
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the end of the time period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, method, year, semester with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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