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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia nad France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia nad France in 1980 and 2000.
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The
pie
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 charts illustrate the
units
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 of
electricity
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 production by
fuel
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 source from 2 different countries,
Australia
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 and
France
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 in the years 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the
units
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 of
electricity
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 in 2000 of 2 countries were larger compared to the 1980.
Australia
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 in 1980
have
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used 50
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 of coal, which took half of the
pie
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chart
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, natural
gas
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 and hydropower were approximately to each other with 20
units
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,
oil
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 being used the least in the
electricity
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fuel
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 with only 10
units
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,
lead
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 to
the
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 total of 100
units
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 of
electricity
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 being used. Came
to
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France
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, in 1980, coal and natural
gas
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 have the same used with 20
units
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 equal, followed by
oil
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 with less than 5
units
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, nuclear power had 15
units
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 in the
pie
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chart
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, and with only 5
units
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 left, belonged
to
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apply
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hydro power
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hydropower
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, the total of
fuel
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 that used in
France
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 was 90
units
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, which was lower compared to
Australia
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. In 2000,
due to
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 the need for
fuel
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was
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being increased, the figures show that there was some peak in the
units
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. Suprisingly, with 130
units
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, took 3/4 of the
pie
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chart
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, coal became the most used
fuel
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 in
Australia
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, hydropower had 36
units
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, and with only 2
units
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 from each
fuel
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, natural
gas
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 and
oil
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, a total of the fuels being used in 2000 from
Australia
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 was increased to 170
units
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. If
Australia
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 used coal the most, so in
France
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, nuclear power was commonly used with 126
units
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, which took more than half of the
pie
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chart
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, coal and
oil
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 have the same amount of consumption with 25
units
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, hydropower and natural
gas
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 being used the least with only 2
units
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 for each
fuel
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, units, electricity, fuel, australia, france, chart, gas, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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