The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia nad France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia nad France in 1980 and 2000.
The
pie
charts illustrate the
units
of
electricity
production by
fuel
source from 2 different countries,
Australia
and
France
in the years 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the
units
of
electricity
in 2000 of 2 countries were larger compared to the 1980.
Australia
in 1980
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used 50
units
of coal, which took half of the
pie
chart
, natural
gas
and hydropower were approximately to each other with 20
units
,
oil
being used the least in the
electricity
fuel
with only 10
units
,
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to
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total of 100
units
of
electricity
being used. Came
to
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France
, in 1980, coal and natural
gas
have the same used with 20
units
equal, followed by
oil
with less than 5
units
, nuclear power had 15
units
in the
pie
chart
, and with only 5
units
left, belonged
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hydro power
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hydropower
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, the total of
fuel
that used in
France
was 90
units
, which was lower compared to
Australia
. In 2000,
due to
the need for
fuel
was
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being increased, the figures show that there was some peak in the
units
. Suprisingly, with 130
units
, took 3/4 of the
pie
chart
, coal became the most used
fuel
in
Australia
, hydropower had 36
units
, and with only 2
units
from each
fuel
, natural
gas
and
oil
, a total of the fuels being used in 2000 from
Australia
was increased to 170
units
. If
Australia
used coal the most, so in
France
, nuclear power was commonly used with 126
units
, which took more than half of the
pie
chart
, coal and
oil
have the same amount of consumption with 25
units
, hydropower and natural
gas
being used the least with only 2
units
for each
fuel
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