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Some people believe that reading is always a good habit. Others feel it depends on which books a person is reading. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is argued among
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 that reading
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 is always beneficial
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 others believe the book that they are reading does matter. In my opinion,
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 reading a huge number of
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 can influence and develop people's view of the world, certain
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 can have a negative impact on behaviours and prospects of life. On the one hand, a significant number of researches have been done to prove that reading
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 in any genre can be effective for people's lives.
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 them, writers' opinions about life lay down in their
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 and by reading them,
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 experience a vast variety of perspectives and
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, they can look into the world with a brighter sight.
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, 1984 written by George Orwell is one of the most influential
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 for readers by drawing an image of a closed society.
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 book by noticing
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 about the downsides of
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 community and suggesting an escape door, gives them a great view.
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, there were psychopath writers throughout history who caused considerable damage to societies and now their
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 are forbidden to publish anymore. These writers, transfer their sinister ideas by beautiful words to the reader's mind resulting in damaging themselves or others.
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, Iran's revolt happened because of Ali Shariati's
books
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 which demonstrated an idealistic world and attracted
individuals
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 at that time
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, after seeing the result, he regretted his writings
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 the damage he had made.
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, it is considered that people, who read
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 more, have a brighter idea about their life
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 others think some
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 have a negative effect on readers. I believe, reading
books
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 can give
individuals
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 a great perspective
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 there are forbidden
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 which cause huge costs for countries and readers must pay attention to the
books
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 they are reading.
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Content Clarity
You should work on making your ideas more clear and comprehensive. At points, it was somewhat difficult to understand the main point of your arguments, mainly in the second paragraph.
Cohesion
Ensure you link your thoughts more cohesively to form a stronger argument. While the ideas are sound, the reasoning sometimes lacks depth, which makes the argument appear a little weak.
Language Use
Use a wider range of grammatical structures and vocabulary to articulate complex ideas, and pay attention to nuances in meaning.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • mental stimulation
  • knowledge acquisition
  • vocabulary expansion
  • stress reduction
  • memory improvement
  • analytical thinking
  • empathy
  • emotional intelligence
  • social cues
  • constructive content
  • morally uplifting
  • misinformation
  • harmful ideologies
  • critical reading skills
  • credible sources
  • inherently good habit
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