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Fast food has become so popular worlwide that it is destroying the nutritional quality of food.what do you think because of this the traditional food and cooking method is being forgotten. Do you agree or disagree with the statement give reasons for you answer.

#food #worlwide #quality #method
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Fast
food
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 is becoming popular throughout the world, and it is destroying the nutritional value of
food
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. Some
people
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 believe that it is because the traditional
food
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 and its cooking
method
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is
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 being forgotten. I completely agree with
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 viewpoint because the cooking
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 of traditional
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 is
time
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-consuming and complicated. One of the reasons for fast
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being
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 popular is the cooking
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 of traditional
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 is
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-consuming. It takes a
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 of
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 to cook traditional
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, which is not convenient for today's fast-paced world.
People
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 do not have the
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 and patience to cook for a long
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 because they have a
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 of other things to do.
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, the young generation
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 not interested in having traditional
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.
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, all traditional
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of
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 Bangladesh requires a
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 of
time
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 to prepare, and
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,
people
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 in
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 country do not eat traditional
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.
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, the preparation
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 of traditional
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 is very complicated. Preparing traditional
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 requires a wide variety of ingredients, and different instructions to follow
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 cooking.
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, cooking traditional dishes needs a
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 of effort, patience and creativity.
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,
people
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 are interested in other easy and alternative methods of cooking, and they do not want to choose traditional meals as their daily
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 options.
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, the most famous traditional dish of Gujrat, India, named "Cholar Dal" needs 8 different complicated steps to follow. In conclusion, these days,
people
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 are inclined to consume more fast
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 because the cooking
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 of traditional
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 is
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-wasting and complicated.
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