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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts give information about three sources of energy produced in 4 countries, namely
India
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,
Sweden
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,
Morocco
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 and
Vietnam
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 Nam in the passage of time from 2003 to 2008.
Overall
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,
Vietnam
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 and
Morocco
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 did not use nuclear power to manufacture
electricity
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. It can be seen that
hydropowerpower
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hydropower power
 was used the most in
Vietnam
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 and
India
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while
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 it occupied a relatively small
proportion
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 in two other countries during the same period. In
Vietnam
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. In
India
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, hydropower power was distributed 14
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percent
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per cent
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 to produce
electricity
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while
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 it plays a significant role in
electricity
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 production up to 95
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percent
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per cent
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 in
Morocco
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. In
Sweden
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 and
Vietnam
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, The
proportion
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 of
hydropowerpower
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hydropower power
 for
electricity
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 manufacturing was around 50
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percent
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per cent
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, particularly, 52
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percent
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per cent
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 and 44
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percent
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per cent
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 in
Sweden
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 and
Vietnam
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 respectively.
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 fossil fuel was preferably used in
Vietnam
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 and
India
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 with 56
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percent
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per cent
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 and 82
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percent
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per cent
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 respectively,
this
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 type of natural source was not used much in
Morocco
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 and
Sweden
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 with a
proportion
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 around 5
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percent
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per cent
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 for the two countries. In
Sweden
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, nuclear energy was used much more than in
India
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,
in particular
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,
this
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proportion
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 was 10 times folded than that in
India
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, sweden, morocco, vietnam, electricity, proportion, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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