The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
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The bar chart illustrates the information about how many metric
tonnes
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of
pineapple
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were sold to foreign countries in the
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world
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by leading exporters in
this
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field,
while
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the pie chart shows the details of various
cost
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costs
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of every single
pineapple
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consumed in 2019.
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overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
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country
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B
deliveried
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delivered
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pineapple
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pineapples
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to other countries
was
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highest in 2009,
whereas
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the number of
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pineapple
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pineapples
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was
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exported by
the
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country
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A reached a peak in 2019. The cost for distribution and retail made up the highest proportion of each
pineapple
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consumed. in 2009, the number of
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pineapple
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pineapples
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was
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sold to other countries by
country
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B accounted for the highest
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some 5 in million
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, in
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contrast to
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country
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C, which was nearly
at
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0 metric
tonnes
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.
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decade later, the
country
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was
tookover
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taken over
as B to leading in
this
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sector with the
figure
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reaching a peak of above 10 metric
tonnes
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in millions,
while
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the
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country
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C
maintain
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its level with just approximately 1 metric
tonnes
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. The vast majority of the cost for each
pineapple
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was distribution and retail, which
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made up the largest percentage about 35%, which was nearly double that of profit. Following that, the
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figure
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for export costs and international transport were 16% and 12%, respectively.
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, the data for
producer
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producers
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and taxes accounted for
a
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lowest proportion, with the
figure
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standing at below 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, pineapple, country, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • dominant
  • emerging trends
  • production costs
  • transportation
  • retailer markup
  • global trade dynamics
  • sustainability
  • market demand
  • economic factors
  • export volumes
  • logistic costs
  • retail price
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