In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Some
peope
argue that many rural Correct your spelling
people
people
Use synonyms
are
Verb problem
have
leaving
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left
Use synonyms
countryside
recently. I strongly believe that most Correct article usage
the countryside
people
hope to live in cities. that will Use synonyms
be
no good effect Verb problem
have
for
us.
Nowadays, Change preposition
on
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countryside's
population is reducing. Correct article usage
the countryside's
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, Linking Words
people
who Use synonyms
could
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can
farming
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farm
are
decreasing too. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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people
study farming Use synonyms
technologe
. The Correct your spelling
technology
studies
contents Change noun form
study's
was
a few Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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people
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people's
possiable
farming methods. So, arm has changed smart Correct your spelling
possible
possibly
farm
by the studies . Fix the agreement mistake
farms
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farm is Add an article
The smart
auto
farming system. That brought the Add an article
an auto
the auto
great
advanced Change the adjective
greatly
countryside
Use synonyms
enviornmemt
.
Correct your spelling
environment
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, the many Linking Words
people
leaving Use synonyms
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countryside
has several severe Correct article usage
the countryside
problem
. Among the Change to a plural noun
problems
problem
, rural Fix the agreement mistake
problems
place
with most Fix the agreement mistake
places
youger
Correct your spelling
younger
young
people
leaving remained a lot of older Use synonyms
people
. Use synonyms
Hence
, the rural lack of Linking Words
worker
. And, Schools Fix the agreement mistake
workers
is
closing. Becasue, chidren disapear too. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Also
, they Linking Words
leaving
after Wrong verb form
leave
remain
their house. Verb problem
leaving
the
house might Capitalize word
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using
crime. Change the verb form
use
be using
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very dangerous. So, Linking Words
government
spend Correct article usage
the government
to
a lot of money Change preposition
apply
for
the empty houses Change preposition
on
gaurd
and patrol. Correct your spelling
guard
Futhermore
, It will be Correct your spelling
Furthermore
development
Correct article usage
a development
unbalnce
between cities Correct your spelling
imbalance
which
Correct word choice
where
people
coming place and Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the countrysides
countrysides
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countryside
which
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where
people
leaving Use synonyms
place
. The mentioned above, both Add an article
the place
a place
problem
will be Fix the agreement mistake
problems
dagerous
Correct your spelling
dangerous
with
us.
In conclusion, despite Change preposition
for
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the countrysides
countrysides
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countryside
develop
to smart farming, I still firmly support Replace the word
development
the
leaving Correct your spelling
that
people
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countrysides
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countryside
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has
negative
effect Add an article
a negative
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our society.Change preposition
on
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