In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Some
peope
argue that many rural Correct your spelling
people
people
are
Verb problem
have
leaving
Wrong verb form
left
countryside
recently. I strongly believe that most Correct article usage
the countryside
people
hope to live in cities. that will be
no good effect Verb problem
have
for
us.
Nowadays, Change preposition
on
countryside's
population is reducing. Correct article usage
the countryside's
Also
, people
who could
Wrong verb form
can
farming
Replace the word
farm
are
decreasing too. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
As a result
, many people
study farming technologe
. The Correct your spelling
technology
studies
contents Change noun form
study's
was
a few Correct subject-verb agreement
were
people
Change noun form
people's
possiable
farming methods. So, arm has changed smart Correct your spelling
possible
possibly
farm
by the studies . Fix the agreement mistake
farms
Smart
farm is Add an article
The smart
auto
farming system. That brought the Add an article
an auto
the auto
great
advanced Change the adjective
greatly
countryside
enviornmemt
.
Correct your spelling
environment
However
, the many people
leaving countryside
has several severe Correct article usage
the countryside
problem
. Among the Change to a plural noun
problems
problem
, rural Fix the agreement mistake
problems
place
with most Fix the agreement mistake
places
youger
Correct your spelling
younger
young
people
leaving remained a lot of older people
. Hence
, the rural lack of worker
. And, Schools Fix the agreement mistake
workers
is
closing. Becasue, chidren disapear too. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Also
, they leaving
after Wrong verb form
leave
remain
their house. Verb problem
leaving
the
house might Capitalize word
The
using
crime. Change the verb form
use
be using
That is
very dangerous. So, government
spend Correct article usage
the government
to
a lot of money Change preposition
apply
for
the empty houses Change preposition
on
gaurd
and patrol. Correct your spelling
guard
Futhermore
, It will be Correct your spelling
Furthermore
development
Correct article usage
a development
unbalnce
between cities Correct your spelling
imbalance
which
Correct word choice
where
people
coming place and Correct article usage
the countrysides
countrysides
Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
which
Correct word choice
where
people
leaving place
. The mentioned above, both Add an article
the place
a place
problem
will be Fix the agreement mistake
problems
dagerous
Correct your spelling
dangerous
with
us.
In conclusion, despite Change preposition
for
Correct article usage
the countrysides
countrysides
Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
develop
to smart farming, I still firmly support Replace the word
development
the
leaving Correct your spelling
that
people
countrysides
Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
is
Verb problem
has
negative
effect Add an article
a negative
for
our society.Change preposition
on
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