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The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port City Center from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant

The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port City Center from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant
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The multi-line graph illustrates data regarding
crime
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 among types of conditions from different regions in New Port City between 2003 and 2012. Generally speaking,
it is clear that
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 the
overall
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 incidence has dramatically decreased in the considered time period, albeit with specific trends for each event. First off, in 2003 burglary was less in
crime
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,
while
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 increasingly numerous
car
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 thefts and robberies.
However
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, the
crime
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 that occurred has aced a steep and constant decrease in number of the burglaries, slumping from 3700 to roughly 1000 between 2004 and 2008. At the same time, the number of
car
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 thefts slowly dipped, from 2700 dropped down to nearly 2000. After that, the events of burglary and
car
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 theft remained steady quantity, approximately 1500 and 2300 respectively.
On the other hand
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, robbery faced only a moderate drop in the rate of a condition, which was nearly one-fifth in the given temporal interval, meanwhile levelled off at roughly 500 from 2003 to 2012.
Finally
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, burglary which had the highest
crime
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 things in the study period, rose by 3400, following
car
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 theft and robbery at the conclusion of a given interval.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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