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In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, travel is one of the most searched experiences to celebrate special days. Social media have intensified
people
’s desire to discover new places through advertisements and posts showing a variety of destinations
people
 can choose to spend their
holidays
, both inside and outside their
country
.
This
 essay will provide reasons why individuals will prefer to go on
holidays
 overseas
instead
 of their homeland. Society is living in a cultural mix as the world becomes more globalized. Through music, movies, TV shows and social media
people
 are experiencing entertainment in many different ways and idioms which make them curious to explore another continent.
For example
, Netflix has a wide variety of series, documentaries and films from all over the world. The images, songs and languages are a huge invitation to be in touch with another culture, for
this
 a lot of
people
 are being attracted to meet new places abroad on
holidays
. Many nations are sealing deals to take students and workers to their own countries through internships to increase economic movement and
also
 for cultural exchange. These opportunities in other lands are another reason why travel on
holidays
 will be more common outside than inside the
country
 birth.
For instance
, parents and friends of immigrants would probably prefer to spend their
holidays
 with their loved ones in another place than stay in their own
country
.
To conclude
,
instead
 of enjoying the holiday in the
country
 birth for an entire life, probably
people
 will embrace the opportunities to travel and meet another culture, exploring and discovering other places in
this
 amazing and giant world.
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