The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004 5

The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004 5
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1950 to 2004, the
number
of people who had different ways of railway trips in the UK and the measuring unit is in millions.
Overall
, the largest
number
of
passengers
frequently took the national
rail
network for
traveling
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while
the smallest
number
of customers used the light
rail
and metro systems as their transportation from 1950 to May
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2004. At first glance, it is clear to see that only the national
rail
network and London Underground worked for individuals in Britain since 1950 and the
number
of
passengers
accounted for 1000
million
and 740
million
, respectively; and both of them had similar declining and increasing trends from the middle of 1980 to the year around 2000 (approximately at 700 to 950
million
passengers
). Until the beginning of 1960, people could take the light
rail
and metro systems for journeys,
however
, the sum of
passengers
had merely counted around 10
million
which was 900 times less than the national
rail
network.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, passengers, rail, million with synonyms.
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