In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

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era,
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can live for a long time
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to the
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decades. Some
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think that old age
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bring problems for
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,
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others and I believe that they have lots of advantages.
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essay explores both notions and personally, I agree that they have more benefits than drawbacks. First of all, the one who argues they have problems for
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society and governments because they say older age
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lack the ability to work and the government should spend money
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, if someone visits their home, he or she will see that they can not prepare food, clean dishes, wash clothes or drive for themselves. They need help in most of their
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aspect and the government should take care of them and serve them in
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special place.
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, the other group argue that they believe older
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and they are
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experienced
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people
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.
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, they served human societies when they were young.
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, parents
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their
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their children and they
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lots of
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for
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their children.
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, some of them are professionals
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as teachers, engineers, athletes, and doctors,
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, it is necessary to learn from them and we should take care
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their
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instead
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of ignoring them.
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, older age
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have more benefits than drawbacks, they are knowledgeable
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and they have lots of
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experience, we can learn from them and they should never
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neglect
them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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