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In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 era,
people
 can live for a long time
compares
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 to the
previews
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previous
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 decades. Some
people
 think that old age
people
 bring problems for
government
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,
while
 others and I believe that they have lots of advantages.
This
 essay explores both notions and personally, I agree that they have more benefits than drawbacks. First of all, the one who argues they have problems for
the
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society and governments because they say older age
people
 lack the ability to work and the government should spend money
for
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 their
lives
.
Furthermore
, if someone visits their home, he or she will see that they can not prepare food, clean dishes, wash clothes or drive for themselves. They need help in most of their
lives
 aspect and the government should take care of them and serve them in
the
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 special place.
On the other hand
, the other group argue that they believe older
people
 are knowledgeable
one
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and they are
experient
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experienced
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people
.
Furthermore
, they served human societies when they were young.
For example
, parents
spent
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thier
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their
lives
to
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 their children and they
paid
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 lots of
pains
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for
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 their children.
In addition
, some of them are professionals
such
 as teachers, engineers, athletes, and doctors,
therefore
, it is necessary to learn from them and we should take care
to
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 their
lives
instead
 of ignoring them.
To sum up
, older age
people
 have more benefits than drawbacks, they are knowledgeable
people
 and they have lots of
life's
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 experience, we can learn from them and they should never
niglect
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neglect
 them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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