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The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The set of bar charts provides information about the percentage of satisfaction rating for married and unmarried
people
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 in the United States and the effect of having
children
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 on the
overall
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 happiness level of married
couples
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. Broadly, it is readily noticeable that married
people
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 are happier compared to unmarried ones.
Moreover
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,
couples
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 who had
children
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 were more pleased than other
categories
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. Based on the first chart, married
people
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 in all age
categories
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 comprised well over 40%.
People
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 aged 18-29 contributed the biggest percentage, followed by the commonalities proportion from
people
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 aged 30-49 and mature
people
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, accounting for 44%.
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, the lowest fraction of married
people
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, ages 50-64 made up exactly 40%.
On the other hand
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, the prominent proportion was shown by those aged more than 60 years, it reported a sizable percentage at around a third per cent.
While
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, other age
categories
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 obtained 21%, 21%, and 22% respectively. Turning to the second graph, there was a slightly different happiness rating in all
categories
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 for
couples
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 married; it was a mere 1-2% dissimilar.
Couples
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 who had
children
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 aged 18-29 years were more delighted, making up 44% of the total proportion. The subsequent
categories
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 came from parents with no descendants and
children
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 aged 18 only by 2%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, children, couples, categories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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