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Band 4

We have been living in the nuclear age now for over half a century. Since the first atomic bombs were developed, nuclear technology has provided governments with the ability to totally destroy the planet. Yet the technology has been put to positive use as an energy source and in certain areas of medicine. What are the benefits and risks associated with its use?

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 that over half a century, there has been a remarkable impact from the
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 of nuclear
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, depending on how
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technology
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 is used.
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, there are advantages and disadvantages to the
use
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 of nuclear
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benefits,
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 it can be used for medical purposes and as a drawback, it can be used as a deadly weapon for mass destruction
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 can affect the planet's well-being.
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 related to the
use
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 of nuclear
technology
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. To commence with, it is irrefutable that nuclear
technology
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 has proper
benefits
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 for the medical industry because it generates chemical reactions that have a big impact . There are some
benefits
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 to the
use
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 of Nuclear
technology
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. First things
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Nuclear
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 can be very useful for building medical technologies, for
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instance
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technology
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.
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, Nuclear
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 can be used as a source of energy
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currently
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 some countries are developing nuclear
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 as a source of renewable energy.
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 there are numerous
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 to the
use
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 of nuclear
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, there are
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 identified potential drawbacks. Nuclear
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 has a fatal
destruction
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 impact
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 of its massive chemical reaction.
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, only a small
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 of
country
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that
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is
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 advanced in managing nuclear
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,
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are
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 countries.
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,
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the utilization
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utilization
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 of
technology
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 should be restricted in some cases.
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, even if there are an enormous
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 advantages, there are
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 some drawbacks that need to be identified
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 the usage of Nuclear
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 has to be maintained strictly.

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task response
Plan your essay with a short map. Say your view in the intro and restate it in the end.
content
In the body, give 2 or 3 main ideas. Each idea should be a full point with a bit of reason.
coherence
Use linking words to show flow, but keep them simple. Do not over use phrases.
coherence
Make the intro and conclusion stronger. State your view clearly in the start and end.
task response
Give real examples for good and bad uses of nuclear tech when you talk about the pros and cons.
content
The essay tries to cover both good and bad sides.
linguistic
There are sign words like 'therefore' and 'to sum up' to join ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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