some people believe that university students should work part time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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indivedual
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individual
individuals

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thinks that university students should get a
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part
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part-time

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time
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job
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.
Overall
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, getting
work
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early in your
life
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holds
a lots
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a lot
lots

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of benefits,
such
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as gaining
experince
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experience

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,becoming more independent and social.
i
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I

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totally agree that a
person
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should do a
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part
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part-time

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time
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job
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.
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Part
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Part-time

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time
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jobs
gives
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give

The singular verb gives does not appear to agree with the plural subject jobs. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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the
person
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a lot of experience, working teach us to be more responsible personally and financially.
when
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When

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going to
work
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indivisual
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individuals

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have to come on
time
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,
taking
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take

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care of chores, more knowledge of
life
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outside
living
Verb problem
apply

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from
parents
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their parents

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for
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For

The word for should be capitalized in this context.

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example, one of my
collage
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college

The word collage doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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friends told me that in her family, when they reach 16 her father will stop giving them money and there
for motivating
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to motivate

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them to go look for
work
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. by doing that she collected money for her university.
she
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She

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said
i
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I

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was mad at that
time
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,
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apply

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because we were young but
i'm
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I'm

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thankfull
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thankful

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for my dad.
he
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He

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taught us how to be strong
if
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If

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it
werent
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weren't

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for him we
will
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would

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be spoiled. Engaging in
work
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life
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let
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lets

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us go outside our comfort zone and
getting
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get

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to know how to deal with people.
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for
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For

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example, a shy
person
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no
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with no

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social
life
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setting in to
work
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will force
him
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apply

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to talk with people and deal with them.
by
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By

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that changing his
personalty
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personality

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and add up to his social skills. In
conculsion
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conclusion

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, a minority of people share thoughts that
a
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apply

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part
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part-time

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time
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work
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will help
the
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apply

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unviersity
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university

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students.
a
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A

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job
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will add to
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a person
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person
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person's

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life
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experience, social and finically, which results in
more
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a more

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mature and independent
person
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.For
that
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,that

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i
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I

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agree
comletelly
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completely

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and
i
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I

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advise them to look for
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job
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a job

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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