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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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Information about the process of brick manufacturing is depicted by a diagram.
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, there are seven main steps. Starting with the extraction of materials,
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 processing
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and
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 delivering the final product.
The first step is
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 mining clay with a digger.
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the clay gets put on a metal grid, which separates the smaller parts, which fall to a roller below the grid, from the bigger ones. After that sand and water are added to the clay. There are
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 ways to get the mixture to the desired well-known shape. The options are with a wire cutter or with a mould. Either way, after that the bricks have to dry for one or
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 days.
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 putting them in a kiln with very high temperatures going from
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 hundred degrees Celcius to over 1300 degrees. Cooling takes between
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 and three days.
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, the product is packed and delivered.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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