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People in the past would always repair damaged products. However, nowadays, people like to throw out and purchase new products. What are the reasons for this? What problems might this cause?

#people #repair #products #purchase
People
 always tried to repair
products
'
of
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damaged, but now,
people
 get away
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from
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them and buy new
of
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them. In my opinion,
this
 behaviour
have
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 some reasons and causes drawback. On the one hand,
this
bavaviour
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behaviour
have
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has
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 some reasons for
people
. I n
the
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first
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, nowadays,
moes
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most
people
 have
good
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a good
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 income so do not need to repair damaged
products
 and
perfer
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prefer
 to buy new things.
In addition
, we face with variety
products
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of products
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 around us with
differetn
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different
company
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companies
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 and
performance
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performances
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.
This
 makes
that
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purchasing new
products
instead
 of
reapair
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reaping
 them.
On the other hand
, buying new
products
 causes problems of
garbages
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garbage
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 and consumption.
At
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 the
begining
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beginning
, most
people
atend
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tend
attend
 to consumption that
every body
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everybody
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 have variety
products
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of products
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 that they do not need
them
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or often use them,
instead
 individuals just purchase them and make
people
are be
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.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, buying new
products
 and
throw
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throwing
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 out old
products
 cause pollution of
environment
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the environment
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, in order to garbage.
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