The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening

courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about

the ages of these course participants
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chart depicts the quantities of males and females that took part in evening courses at the education centre for adults
while
the pie shows the attendees' age groups in 2009.
Overall
, ladies tend to participate more in most of the classes except for the sculpture. Old
people
took the majority of the total. It was estimated that 20 women
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the drama class, twice more than
that
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of
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men,
the
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same ratio
happening
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in
language
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class. Painting classes had the smallest differences with 5 more women
joined
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than men.
In contrast
,
sculpture
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was the only class with more
male
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males
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than
female
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females
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. Young
people
only took 5% of the total participants in the course. The age group of 30 to 39 had the same proportion as the ages of less than 20 to 29 combined, middle-aged
people
took 26% of
total
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amount.
People
from 50 years old or more joined the most with 42%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance
  • participant
  • adult education
  • distribution
  • proportion
  • engaged
  • trend
  • mid-career
  • popularity
  • speculate
  • job-oriented
  • creative courses
  • leisure aspect
  • enroll
  • correlation
  • inclined
  • career-oriented
  • hobby-related
  • literacy
  • technical skills
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