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You want to sell your bicycle. Your friend has told you that his cousin might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend’s cousin. In your letter explain why you are selling the bicycle describe the bicycle and how much it will cost suggest a date when your friend’s cousin can come and see the bicycle

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Dear Bella, I hope you're doing well. I heard you
interested
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to buy
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in buying
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 my
bicycle
. So, I wanna describe
you
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to you
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about
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the about
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 information
of
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the
bicycle
.
Firstly
, I want to sell my
currently
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bicycle
 because
this
 bike is not flexible for me
as well as
 sitting on the pad. Because the pad is too small
so that
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it is not comfortable
while
 I'm riding.
Furthermore
, I don't like
this
color
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colour
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 anymore. Before I love pink
color
, but not now. Now I like the
color
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colour
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 that looks dark.
Secondly
,
this
bicycle
 is folding
bicyble
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bicycle
. You can put them on your car roof or the back of your car. You can bring them
for
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to
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 any place you want.
In addition
, It is a pink
color
one
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with one
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 and 2 wheels. I think it is suitable
with
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for
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 you. I
had
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bought it
around
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for around
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 10,000 Bath. So, I want to sell you in 5,000 Bath.
Third,
if you want to see it
instead
seeing
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of seeing
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 the pictures on
the
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social. You can come to my home on
this
 Friday around 2 pm. I'm home on that day. Let me know if you want to buy my
bicycle
 and hope you like it. Best wishes Dream
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