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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that
tourists
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 who travel to other
countries
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 should
respect
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 the culture of the
host
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country
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,
whereas
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 other
people
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 believe that nations should
respect
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tourists
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 from different
cultures
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 and welcome them into their
countries
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. I will discuss both views in
this
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 essay.
However
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, I advocate the latter group.
To begin
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 with, the
people
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 of the
host
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country
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 may think that new
cultures
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 and behaviours of
tourists
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 can be a threat to their society.
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, they believe that individuals may be interested in other
cultures
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 and they can forget their local customs.
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, a new style of wearing clothes or new foods would develop
instead
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 of their traditional ones. Some Islamic
countries
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 have banned using drinks that contain alcohol,
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, these
countries
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 think that
visitors
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 should follow local rules and traditions.
On the other hand
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, Tourism helps
people
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 to represent their
cultures
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 and traditions worldwide. Governments should raise public awareness about it and
also
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, they should be more flexible with
visitors
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 from other nations to develop the tourist industry. Tourism not only represents
cultures
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,
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 but
also
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 creates greater employment opportunities.
For example
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, a growing number of young
people
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 are willing to work as tourist guides. If the
people
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 of a
host
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country
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 do not
respect
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 their
tourists
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, they will lose their
tourists
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 from the tourist destination.
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,
people
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 and the government should welcome new
visitors
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 to their
country
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. In conclusion, I believe that the
host
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country
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 should accept their
visitors
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 with
respect
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 and they can follow the ideal styles and
cultures
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 of the
tourists
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 which do not make any violation with their traditions.
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