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The chart gives information about questionaire results for drinking habits, purchasing fresh tea, and people's coffee in five different Australian cities (Sydney,Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart). Overall, it is clear from the chart the highest rate of city residents went to a cafe for drinking coffee or tea, while, the lowest rate of them purchased fresh coffee.

The chart gives information about questionaire results for drinking habits, purchasing fresh tea, and people's coffee in five different Australian cities (Sydney,Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart). Overall, it is clear from the chart the highest rate of city residents went to a cafe for drinking coffee or tea, while, the lowest rate of them purchased fresh coffee.
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The chart gives information about questionnaire results for drinking habits, purchasing fresh tea, and people's
coffee
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 in five different Australian cities (
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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, Adelaide,
Hobart
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).
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart the highest
rate
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 of city residents went to a cafe to drink
coffee
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 or tea,
while
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, the lowest
rate
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 of them purchased fresh
coffee
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. First of all, in the
last
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 four weeks, most Australian citizens went to a cafe to drink
coffee
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 or tea. In three cities
as
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Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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, and
Hobart
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 approximately reached
to
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62%,
however
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,
this
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rate
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 declined to about 55% in
Brisbane
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 city.
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, Adelaide City approximately recorded the lowest
rate
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 (50%).
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, the
rate
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 of people who bought instant
coffee
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 was nearly similar in all cities. In
Hobart
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 and
Brisbane
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 nearly peaked (53%),
while
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 it reduced in
Sydney
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 and was nearly 45%.
Moreover
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,
in
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Melbourne
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 was between
Brisbane
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 and
Sydney
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 about 47%.
Lastly
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,
Brisbane
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 and Adelaide had the lowest
rate
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 nearly (33%), and
Hobart
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 was a little bit more nearly 37%.
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,
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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 were nearly increased to 43%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 95%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, hobart, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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