IELTS Writing Correction Service / Writing Samples / Band 8.5 Your friend has been offered a place on course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - describe where you lived when you were a student at the university - recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation - warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing

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Dear Ryback, Congratulations on your admission and I am so glad to hear that you are going to the same university where I studied. As requested, let me share my experience with you in finding decent accommodation during your study. I have been living in a small flat just 10 minutes away from the university building for four years

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I was studying. The house was well-appointed and convenient.

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, it was near the bus stop and metro station, so I could commute to the university at the lowest cost. I would suggest you search on websites

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as Carousel or Facebook Marketplace. You can filter the search by putting in the area and how many rooms you would like to live in. When choosing your place, I suggest that you check the contract carefully and understand it thoroughly as some students may face legal issues that are out of their expectations (i.e., extra pay for damaged items). Hope you will find

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information useful and please let me know if you need any more help. All the best, Ella

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

180 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

shared apartment
off campus
convenient
moderately priced
university accommodation office
student forums
social media groups
available rooms
apartments
committing
long-term leases
location's convenience
daily commute

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