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Is a better for students to study from home rather than go to school do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #study #home #school
Some people think
that is
 better for
students
 to
study
 from home rather than go to
school
. In my
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opinions
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 I disagree with the statement. On the one
hand
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 studying at
school
 is the main issue in improving no click higher education
if
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 you
study
 at
school
, you can't understand more easily because online learning is too rigid , and difficult to find detailed standards or documents to
study
 teacher has certification in the subject and major
for example
 you can quickly yes is there an answer to your problem in class from the teacher
instead
 of feeling stuck on the homepage on internet are in documentaries
Moreover
, studying at
school
 can many friends and easily participate in many outside activities and improve social skills
instead
 of studying at
school
On the other hand
, studying online is more comfortable than at
school
 because you can be proactive with your timetable early time and be flexible about your
study
 time. No one wants to wake up early or be annoyed alarm clock so online learning can keep
students
 from running
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applying the clock every morning.
second
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, competition is not an issue many
students
study
 just
with
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one reason is their
score
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scores
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. Pressure on grades in
school
but
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it
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cause disadvantage for
students
. Sometimes they forget that the purpose of learning is to gain more knowledge rather than grades
Also
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study
 is the most important, but relaxed and focused
study
 can make
this
 work. off-line learning is the best way to easily acquire knowledge and improve social skill
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