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Nowdays , many people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of news, do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is often argued that many individuals
use
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 different applications to connect with family and friends and to be aware of what is happening in the
world
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.
This
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 essay will examine the merits and demerits of social
media
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. First and foremost, the main advantage of using mobile apps is that they help us to keep in touch with our loved ones, especially friends and family. In past, communication was not that much easier,
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, nowadays it is very convenient to connect with anyone sitting in any part of the
world
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due to
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 technological advancement.
Secondly
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, we can easily be aware of what is happening in the
world
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.
For example
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,
media
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 plays a vital role in giving daily updates
of
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 whatever is happening in today's
world
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.
Thus
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, social
media
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 and technological advancement
has
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 made life easier.
On the contrary
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, social
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also
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 has some disadvantages. They are, excessive
use
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 of social
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 which has adverse effects on human health,
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 as eyesight defects and inappropriate
use
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 of social
media
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.
Although
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 social
media
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 has minor attractive pros, it
also
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 has some demerits.
In other words
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, overuse of anything is bad.
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, mobile phone apps should be used in limit and parents should monitor the usage of their children.
In addition
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 to that, nowadays too much
use
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 of social
media
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 has affected human eyes severely.
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,
according to
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 a survey conducted by a renowned organization, a large number of people are using mobile applications inappropriately using fake identities.
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,
it is clear that
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 the disadvantages of social
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 are numerous and undeniable. In conclusion,
although
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 the merits of social
media
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 are numerous, it has a large number of disadvantages. I believe that the drawbacks of social
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 outweigh its benefits
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 the aforementioned reasons.

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