Some people think it s good for teenagers to have part time jobs, while other people believe teenagers should not work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, there are many types of
part
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time
jobs
in the country. Some people believe that
teenagers
must have
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part-time
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time
jobs
others people believe that
teenagers
should not work. In
this
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I will discuss
about
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both views and write down my own opinion
that
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how I think. On the
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hand,
mostly
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parents
in the USA have to tell their children to
got
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a work.
In addition
, their children must be
in
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18+ age up.
Hence
, Every
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teenager
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in
USA
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might
have
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go out to do
part
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part-time
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time
jobs
after
the
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school.
Such
as a fast food waiter, a cleaner, and a
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babysitting
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.
While
they
are having
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have
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a
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apply
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part
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part-time
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time
jobs
they can get
a
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own money except
getting
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from their
parents
.
However
, some
parents
think that
to
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having a
part
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part-time
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time
jobs
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for
teenagers
is
wasting
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a waste of
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time
.
For example
, if their kid must have
a
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work after school
it
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they
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will
be lose
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the
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time
for learning the subjects and doing the homework for school.
On the other hand
, I think that
teenagers
should do a
part
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part-time
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time
jobs
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job
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. Because making
a
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money
from
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other ways
instead
getting
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of getting
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from
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it from
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the
parents
is
good
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a good
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thing.
For example
,
teenagers
in Thailand
are normally do
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normally do
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not have
a
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apply
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part
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part-time
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time
jobs
. So, they do not know how to survive
theire
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their
there
life and do not know how getting money is not easy. They love
to
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the
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convenience
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life. In conclusion, I have described both
of
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view
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views
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and
give
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my opinion about
teenagers
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whether teenagers
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should have
part
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part-time
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time
jobs
or not.
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