Some people believe that "Employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress, but the quality of their work". To what extent do you agree or disagree to this belief?

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Nowadays there is a

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dilemma

about

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code

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at the

work place

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. Individuals have different opinions,

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into two groups. The first group believes that

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do not need to care about

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second

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group argued that employees must have a

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. From my perspective, l do not have a concrete position and answer which group I support . So, in

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issue. On the one hand, many companies have

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dress

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it is suits and dresses, in the state organisations

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police or medicine they have a special

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with ,if you often communicate with various

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because of your job you need to look formal,serious and tidy.

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, you need to wear

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, if you work

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fireman,police officer,nurse or doctor you have to wear a special

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this

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was created

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for your convenience.

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to keep you safe.

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, it represents that you

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real special

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you

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a random person.

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dress

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code

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is not always appropriate.

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people

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who work with their hands should feel

theirselves

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themselves

comfortable and flexible as a matter of

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apply

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fact they do not need a

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code

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, IT

people

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progromist

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programs

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do not need

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dress

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a dress

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too, because they have

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a sedentary

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job

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jobs

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in which is not convenient to

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table. In conclusion,

dress

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code

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is a vital thing for certain jobs.

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, when in your job you do not need to communicate with

people

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, you stay in a safe place

you

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and you

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can wear whatever you want.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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