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Some people believe that "Employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress, but the quality of their work". To what extent do you agree or disagree to this belief?

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Nowadays there is a
delema
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dilemma
 about
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dress
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the dress
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code
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 at the
work place
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workplace
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. Individuals have different opinions,
thus
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, they
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are separated
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 into two groups. The first group believes that
stuff
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staff
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 do not need to care about
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uniform
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uniforms
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.
However
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,
second
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the second
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 group argued that employees must have a
dress
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code
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. From my perspective, l do not have a concrete position and answer which group I support . So, in
this
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 essay, I will
further
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 examine
this
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thought provoking
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 issue. On the one hand, many companies have
own
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their own
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dress
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code
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.
For instance
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, in the
office
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,office
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 it is suits and dresses, in the state organisations
for example
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 police or medicine they have a special
uniform
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.
To begin
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 with ,if you often communicate with various
people
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 because of your job you need to look formal,serious and tidy.
As a result
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, you need to wear
suit
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a suit
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.
Furthermore
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, if you work
a
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as a
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fireman,police officer,nurse or doctor you have to wear a special
uniform
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Firstly
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,
this
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uniform
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 was created
specially
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 for your convenience.
In addition
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, it
help
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helps
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 to keep you safe.
Also
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, it represents that you
a
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are a
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real special
instead
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 of
you
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apply
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a random person.
On the other hand
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,
dress
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code
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 is not always appropriate.
For instance
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,
people
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 who work with their hands should feel
theirselves
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themselves
 comfortable and flexible as a matter of
a
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apply
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fact they do not need a
dress
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code
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.
Moreover
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, IT
people
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 like
progromist
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programs
they
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apply
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do not need
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dress
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a dress
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code
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 too, because they have
sedentary
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a sedentary
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job
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jobs
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 in which is not convenient to
seat
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sit
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neat
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neatly
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a
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at a
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table. In conclusion,
dress
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code
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 is a vital thing for certain jobs.
Nevertheless
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, when in your job you do not need to communicate with
people
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, you stay in a safe place
you
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and you
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 can wear whatever you want.

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