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Nowadays, as apart of education process, students work at acompany for ashort period of time withut pay.Do the advanatges outweigh the disadvantages?

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this
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 become more often in the education systems for a little
while
. There are myriad positive outcomes as compared to the negative impact of working free. On the one side of
coin
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, there are
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numerous
 advantages
while
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 working for an organization
to
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 the pupils. AS they will get the
experience
 to work in the workplace environment.Through
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 training students can learn plenty of new things which are not mentioned in their books.
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this
experience
 will help them in the future to work for the big named companies.
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 practical knowledge is
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totally
 different from
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academic.
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, in many colleges and universities learners are often asked to do their placements without getting a single penny. It is fruitful for them as they gain
experience
 over there and after a period of time they can get a job at
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the same place or somewhere else. On the flip side of the coin, there are some demerits to the scholars. It may
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 the financial problem to them .
As working
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 nowadays without money could affect them financially.
Their
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 is no other source of their income to do the basic
necesssary
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necessary
 needs.
For instance
, As in most
of
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the
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learning places Internship is a part
their
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 study as well and students have to pay the
tution
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tuition
 fee as well and after that work for free at the same time.
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 a wastage of time and money as
will
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.
To conclude
, I believe that even working in
a
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 organization without getting any money is beneficial for the students to grasp the knowledge and
experience
 which they can use in
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fulture
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future
culture
.
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