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Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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In
this
 contemporary world, a large number of crowd do not know others or who live beside them in enormous cities. Well, in the forthcoming ,paragraphs we will discuss the causes with the relevant solutions to solve
this
 issue.
To begin
 with, the main reason for
this
 problem is the busy lifestyle among people
such
 as long working hours, transportation time and taking care of their families. These days, Individuals give more preference to their work rather than concentrating on other aspects of society, because nuclear families have only two to three members who generate revenue to meet their monthly expenses. On the other side, Traffic jams
also
 impact as people have to commute for their work which takes their most of time. Afterwards, family responsibilities
such
 as cooking food, laundry, cleaning etc.
As a result
, they have no energy to communicate with their neighbours.
However
, there are some solutions to mitigate
this
 issue
such
 as planning some social get-togethers like hosting an event, and parties where all can do some fun activities on weekends. Not only
this
 but
also
 inviting your neighbours on evening tea with some snacks build a good relationship between them.
In addition
, families who have children could let them play with each other and strike a friendship. In
this
 way, the child’s parents meet and get to know others’ parents as well. In conclusion,
although
 responsibility makes people tired of getting in touch with their neighbours organizing events makes it easier to meet and know each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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