The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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People
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who belong to the obsolete era follow religious teachings about the
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of living and building up the individual’s character. But others assert that
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to get comfortable with the modern world, these patterns and religious ideas would not assist in building our upcoming generation, and I fully agree with
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statement. Because,
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my belief, traditional ideas are not scientifically proven
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unclear evidence, and challenging to abide
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. Every culture has a tradition of
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of living their
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such
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as honest behaviour all the time, fasting for several days, thinking positively all the time and
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, immolation of animals in the name of traditional
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,
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who believe in technology rather than religious or traditional
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, oppose these activities as none of them experienced any considerable positive impact in their
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when they followed.
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, a friend of mine has voiced out that his wishes did not come true either by immolating animals in the name of god or by fasting.
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, these were challenging for him to follow.
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to that,
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with traditional
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force others to wear ethnic costumes
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their culture.
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, it is highly difficult to wear and carry ethnic wear in daily
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because of the design, and not supported in official meets as Western wear is widely accepted
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such
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occasions. To illustrate, when I asked my colleagues about their preferences for costumes, everyone claimed that they
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more comfortable with clothes other than ethnic wear or traditional costumes.
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, It is seen that
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with traditional backgrounds move ahead in their
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with their traditional
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about the
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of living, behaving and so on. I believe that it is worthwhile to put
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beliefs
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aside and live the
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you are comfortable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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