The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
People
who belong to the obsolete era follow religious teachings about the way
of living and building up the individual’s character. But others assert that,
to get comfortable with the modern world, these patterns and religious ideas would not assist in building our upcoming generation, and I fully agree with Remove the comma
apply
this
statement. Because, according to
my belief, traditional ideas are not scientifically proven due to
unclear evidence, and challenging to abide with
.
Every culture has a tradition of Change preposition
by
way
of living their lives
such
as honest behaviour all the time, fasting for several days, thinking positively all the time and lastly
, immolation of animals in the name of traditional beliefs
. However
, people
who believe in technology rather than religious or traditional beliefs
, oppose these activities as none of them experienced any considerable positive impact in their lives
,
when they followed. Remove the comma
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For instance
, a friend of mine has voiced out that his wishes did not come true either by immolating animals in the name of god or by fasting. Moreover
, these were challenging for him to follow.
In addition
to that, people
with traditional beliefs
force others to wear ethnic costumes according to
their culture. In
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On
contrary
, it is highly difficult to wear and carry ethnic wear in daily Correct article usage
the contrary
lives
because of the design, and not supported in official meets as Western wear is widely accepted Fix the agreement mistake
life
in
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on
such
occasions. To illustrate, when I asked my colleagues about their preferences for costumes, everyone claimed that they are
more comfortable with clothes other than ethnic wear or traditional costumes.
Wrong verb form
were
To sum up
, It is seen that people
with traditional backgrounds move ahead in their lives
with their traditional beliefs
about the way
of living, behaving and so on. I believe that it is worthwhile to put such
beliefs
aside and live the way
you are comfortable.Submitted by hussainshariff.md1 on
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