Today, many people spend less and less time in their homes. What are the reasons and what are the effects on individuals and society?

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It is indeed true that nowadays

people

are spending less

time

in their

home

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with their family

members

. There are many

reason

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behind

this

problem among them

job

pressure

one

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of the

factor

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. In

this

essay

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I will discuss the

reason

and give my own opinion from my own view.

To begin

with, nowadays most of the

people

are busy for their jobs and business. Every

product

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prices

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price

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are

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growing

high

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day by day which

affect

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affects

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them

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apply

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their daily lifestyle.

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, in Bangladesh, most

people

are facing difficult circumference for high prices for the

reason

the

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they

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our

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their

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time

job

the

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apply

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find another

job

as per

time

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this

reason

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it is very hard for

people

to spend

their

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apply

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time

with their family

members

On the other hand

, it not only

effects

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affects

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their own

life

but

also

it can

effect

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affect

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society

. If anyone

earn

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earns

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more money, they can

also

contribute they are

society

Society

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development

depend

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depends

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their

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apply

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individuals

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individual

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income so when every

people

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person

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started

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earning more money, it will

also

help

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society

grow

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However

, our timing

job

also

affects

individuals

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individuals'

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personal

life

. It is

moral

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responsibility

for

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everyone to provide their basic needs but

also

it is crucial to spend

time

with their family

members

. It

not

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only for their happiness but

also

it helps to make a good relationship with family

members

. If anyone

spend

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times

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time

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with their children,

help

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to make a good bonding with them.

To conclude

, it is true that

peoples

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people

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are not spending much

time

in their

home

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homes

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because of their busy

life

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lives

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However

, we should take some

time

from

there

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their

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busy

life

so that they can spend some

time

with their family member.

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Today, many people spend less and less time in their homes. What are the reasons and what are the effects on individuals and society?

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Conveninence foods will become increasingly prevalnet and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of prepration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people try to balance work and other parts of their life. However, this is very difficult to do. What are the problems associated with this? What is the best way to achieve a better balance? Write at least 250 words.

Some people think it is better for children to grow up in the city while others think that life is countryside is more suitable for them. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed their education and found jobs. Do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

In today’s job market, it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?