Today, many people spend less and less time in their homes. What are the reasons and what are the effects on individuals and society?

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It is indeed true that nowadays

people

are spending less

time

in their

home

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with their family

members

. There are many

reason

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behind

this

problem among them

job

pressure

one

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of the

factor

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. In

this

essay

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I will discuss the

reason

and give my own opinion from my own view.

To begin

with, nowadays most of the

people

are busy for their jobs and business. Every

product

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prices

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price

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are

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growing

high

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day by day which

affect

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affects

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them

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apply

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their daily lifestyle.

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, in Bangladesh, most

people

are facing difficult circumference for high prices for the

reason

the

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they

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our

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their

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time

job

the

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apply

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find another

job

as per

time

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this

reason

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it is very hard for

people

to spend

their

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apply

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time

with their family

members

On the other hand

, it not only

effects

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affects

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their own

life

but

also

it can

effect

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affect

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apply

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society

. If anyone

earn

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earns

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more money, they can

also

contribute they are

society

Society

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development

depend

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depends

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their

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apply

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individuals

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individual

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income so when every

people

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person

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started

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starts

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earning more money, it will

also

help

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society

grow

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However

, our timing

job

also

affects

individuals

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individuals'

individual's

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personal

life

. It is

moral

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responsibility

for

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everyone to provide their basic needs but

also

it is crucial to spend

time

with their family

members

. It

not

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only for their happiness but

also

it helps to make a good relationship with family

members

. If anyone

spend

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times

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time

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with their children,

help

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to make a good bonding with them.

To conclude

, it is true that

peoples

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people

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are not spending much

time

in their

home

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homes

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because of their busy

life

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lives

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However

, we should take some

time

from

there

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their

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busy

life

so that they can spend some

time

with their family member.

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7Word repetition
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41Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Today, many people spend less and less time in their homes. What are the reasons and what are the effects on individuals and society?

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Write a letter to a friend who is coming to stay at your apartment while you are away on vacation. In your letter, •Tell him/ her about your flat. •Give him/ her some instructions about his/ her stay. •Tell him/ her what to do in case of problem.

Many people argue that the average age of drinking should be above the current set age. Others think it should be above the individual and shouldn’t be based on the factor of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A cafe near your home puts some chairs and tables on the pavement for customers. This creates a problem for you. Write a letter to the cafe manager to complain about this matter. In your letter: describe the problem; explain how it affects you; say what you will do if this matter is not resolved.

Billions of dollars are being wasted on space research. The money used could be better if used to improving condition on people on earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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