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The graph below shows the total revenue of three pizza places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the total revenue of three pizza places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the total revenue of three
pizza
 places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017.
Overall
,
while
 the
pizza
 company exhibited an upward trend, the figure for
pizza hut
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Pizza Hut
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 declined gradually throughout the period. In January, the figure for the
pizza
 company was nearly 35 $US
millions
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million
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 and
then
 it started to drop slightly to under 15 $US
millions
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million
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, in February.
However
, from
march
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 to
july
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July
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, it began to rise dramatically, from under 15 to more than 40.
Furthermore
, from August to December, it kept growing gradually to 35 $US
millions
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million
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. As regards, in January, the data for
domino
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Domino Pizza
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pizza
 was more than 30 $US
millions
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million
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.
Then
 , it decreased moderately to 10 $US
millions
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million
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. Between March and July, it increased rapidly to 30$. From August onwards, it continued to grow gradually to 35$.
By contrast
, the figure for
pizza hut
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Pizza Hut
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 experienced a downward trend. From January to June, it rose slowly to more than 10$. After that, it decreased sharply from more than 10$
ro
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to
 under 5$.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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