The graph below shows the total revenue of three pizza places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The line graph illustrates the total revenue of three

pizza

places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017.

Overall

while

the

pizza

company exhibited an upward trend, the figure for

pizza hut

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Pizza Hut

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declined gradually throughout the period. In January, the figure for the

pizza

company was nearly 35 $US

millions

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million

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and

then

it started to drop slightly to under 15 $US

millions

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million

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, in February.

However

, from

march

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March

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july

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July

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, it began to rise dramatically, from under 15 to more than 40.

Furthermore

, from August to December, it kept growing gradually to 35 $US

millions

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million

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. As regards, in January, the data for

domino

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Domino Pizza

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pizza

was more than 30 $US

millions

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million

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Then

, it decreased moderately to 10 $US

millions

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million

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. Between March and July, it increased rapidly to 30$. From August onwards, it continued to grow gradually to 35$.

By contrast

, the figure for

pizza hut

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Pizza Hut

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experienced a downward trend. From January to June, it rose slowly to more than 10$. After that, it decreased sharply from more than 10$

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under 5$.

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