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In order to study at the university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree?

#study #university #students #tuition #fees #people #education
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University
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education
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 costs are priced and not affordable for citizens so
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 some,
university
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 should be free for all
students
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 regardless of their background. I will challenge
this
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 school of thought because of an illogical idea and,
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, it should be offered only to certain individuals. Granted, one might argue that giving no fees at
university
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 means that
students
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 will no longer have to work at the same time as studying to cover their expenses.
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 is predicated on the assumption that almost all people studying in America or the UK have to work both full-time and part-time
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high
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 standard
living
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of living
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 costs abroad.
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,
this
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 line of reason is not sound because it fails to factor in putting
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 burden financial on
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the government
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. Since universities have no income and
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, they would rely completely on the state of funding which means taking funds from other
much needed
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 areas
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 as the health system, the
transportations
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 or
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elderly services. On the same perspective, some advocates suppose that providing free higher learning will increase the universalization of
education
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 in a country
which
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that
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 gives qualified staff and skilled professionals who benefit all
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aspects of
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society, especially in economics.
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, some European countries
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 as Germany or Finland applied no tuition charge for their citizens, leading to a high rate of
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 and high average income per capita.
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, if the government offers free higher
education
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 for all,
students
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 might take it for granted and start to avoid their duties even
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if
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 they are interested or not resulting in neglecting and not focusing on their studies as they will not lose any expenses for their
education
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.
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, providing free
university
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education
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 can help a nation achieve greater heights in terms of
education
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 level and economy, but it may come with a price of
students
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 not taking the free
education
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 seriously because of not having to pay any fees.
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