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Trees are important in human's life. should we cut down the trees or not?

Trees
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plays
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 a significant role in human life. They provide calmness to our
mind
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minds
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and
sense
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a sense
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 of serenity. They
also
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 produce huge
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amount
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amounts
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 of oxygen in an environment that reduces carbon dioxide
level
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 in the
air
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 . First of all,
trees
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offers
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 enormous benefits to
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surroundings
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the surroundings
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. They enhance the beauty of
the
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nature with their
greenary
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greenery
.
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, they help to reduce carbon footprints made by humans by producing huge
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amount
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 of oxygen, which in
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, helps to reduce humidity in an environment.
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, green areas
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 as
Himalaya
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 has
huge
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amount
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 of
trees
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 that beautify the region with their positive effects
to
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 the people and climate.
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,
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 place is still safe from the effects of global warming and known for its lush green
surroundings
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 and
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 fact clearly
convince
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 the masses to believe that
how
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apply
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trees
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 are beneficial for human life.
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,
trees
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helps
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 to decrease diseases in
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surroundings
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. They produce fresh
air
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 that reduces filth in an environment , which
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decline
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the
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respiratory ailments .They indirectly increase
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human life expectancy by providing fresh
air
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. To exemplify, Tasmania in Australia has
tremendous
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amount
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 of
trees
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 that make the region different from other places, even
it
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 sells its fresh
air
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 to other parts of the country.
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 is why, it has less number of
asthmetic
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asthmatic
 patients as compared to other places.
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, it is indubitably advantageous to grow more
trees
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surroundings
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, as it does not have any negative effects. In conclusion,
trees
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 are really beneficial for human health as they have
power
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the power
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 to battle against human psychological diseases.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for instance
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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