Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say it is useful only for entertainment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A controversial

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argument is being maintained
whether
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about whether

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television
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can us for studies or leisure activities by the supporters, who
obligated
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to the ach parties.
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, I guess that TV is
a
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an

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essential tool for education and
this
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essay will elaborate profoundly to justify my opinion. On
one
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hand
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,hand

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educational advantages are considerably increased
of
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apply

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the
television
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on
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present days.
This
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gadget
is
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is used

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use
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by many teachers to clarify their lessons in most
class rooms
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classrooms

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due to
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convenience to
undestand
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understand

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because it is ideal to
use
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visual
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visuals

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to teach students in
easy
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an easy

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way
as well as
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some particular programmes, which broadcast based on
school
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the school

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curriculum
also
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extra support to enhance their knowledge.
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, most schools in Sri Lanka
use
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TVs in their
class room
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classroom

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use
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vedios
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videos

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and educational programmes, which
increase
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increases

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the perception of the children.
Therefore
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, there are many advantages
in
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to

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using
television
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for teaching.
On the other hand
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, a few
drowbacks
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drawbacks

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also
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along with
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this
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tool,
such
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as pupils are addicted to
watch
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watching

The verb watch may be in the wrong form after the preposition to. Consider changing it to the gerund form.

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television
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as it contains more
colorful
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colourful

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and
mesmerized
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mesmerising

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segments.
In addition
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, using visual media as
teaching
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a teaching

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method
for
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in

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long
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the long

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run may cause
loss
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a loss

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of imagination
of
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in

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the
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apply

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teenagers. If juveniles did not utilize equipment would be able to think and create the lesson in their mind which
is
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apply

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accelerated the brain function.
For instance
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,
watchin
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watching
watchin'

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television
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was
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has

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brought adverse effect
to
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on

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one of my
collegue
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colleague
colleagues

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being unable to solve
mathematic
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mathematical

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calculations for his examination
due to
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the
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apply

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exessive
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excessive

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usage
for
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of

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maths subject. Though unlimited usage might
occur
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have

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negative
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a negative

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impact, could be prevented by implementing necessary
precausions
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precautions

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.
To conclude
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,
although
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there are a few advantages,
such
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as
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decreased
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decreased

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decrease
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decreased

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imagination might be
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alleviated
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alleviated

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alleviate
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alleviated

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by applying proper measures,
valuble
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valuable

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positive development
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is
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is

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are
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is

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highly effective
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in
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in

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to
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in

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the success of the students, which is able to be used as a supportive tool for the education field.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational programs
  • informative documentaries
  • interactive learning
  • entertaining content
  • reality shows
  • cartoons
  • intellectual development
  • parental guidance
  • screen time
  • creative thinking
  • educational potential
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