Some children found some subject eg mathematics and philosophy,… difficult so these subjects should be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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cources
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learned by
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? There are schoolchildren who have some difficulty in learning some
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like mathematics and philosophy ,and these
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are on the
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of the schools and they should be taught. I believe that,
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everyone
have
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somehow, it should not be a must for advanced
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of these
curces
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. Some
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are flowing
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through our
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, and despite
of
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their difficulties,
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should become
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with them.
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In Mahematics

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,
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, if someone cannot calculate
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simple equation, not only are they unable to handle their life, but
also
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they are easily frauded. Math is needed
while
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we go shopping to adjust our
cost
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and income.
Also
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, when we pay for something, we have to know how much exchange the
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should return. Philosopy is
the
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another example
that is
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better for
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to know it. It helps us to encounter unexpected happens and deal with them more thoughtfully.
Lessons
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like
philosopy
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help us to expand our
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which
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to
make
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a more
precisely
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decision.
Thus
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, learning
such
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topics at
basic
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or intermediate
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would be helpful.
One
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the other hand, schools or
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teach some difficult
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compulsory at high levels which result in some
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.
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,
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may become stressed and anxious, leading to health issues, lack of concentration, and low confidence.
it
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has been seen that people who endure
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in their lives, have
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more problems like dismal and depression.
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,
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struggling with understanding hard
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,
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lost
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the opportunity to find their interests and
linger
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to follow their dreams. In conclusion,
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on
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like Mathematics and
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could be obligatory at
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fondumental
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fundamental
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to enable
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for
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their
life
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, it is better that advanced
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level
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of those
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voluntary to allow the
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to find their pursuit and avoid stress. As I
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earlier,
may be
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it is beneficial for
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to grasp these forced
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just as much as they will need in the future.

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