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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Children
 are brought up in two different types of
families
. The first one is
families
 that do not have large amounts of money and the other is wealthy
families
. There are some opinions about which one
children
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 is better prepared to deal with the problems of adult
life
. I personally agree that
children
 who are brought up in
families
 that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared for the future. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I agree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, based on my experience, I found some examples of people that raised in an average economy family becoming more successful because they usually work harder for what they want to achieve. They tend to be more persistent because their desire to change their
life
 better is greater than the
children
 who are raised in wealthy
families
.
Furthermore
, the majority of
this
 type has been usually experienced regarding how hard
life
 is and how to handle it. So when they face an obstacle, they tend to be calm and can think clearly to solve it.
Nevertheless
, it does not mean that the other types of
children
 can not do the same. Some of the
children
 who are raised in wealthy
families
 are
also
 can solve their
trouble
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 in adult
life
.
Finally
,
although
 some of my
experienced
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 show a positive trend about how
children
 who
raised
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 in an average economy
families
 handle the issue, the opposite one
also
 has some positive sides. In conclusion, I believe most of the
children
 who are brought
in
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families
 that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared for their future and to deal with the
issue
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 of adult
life
. It would be more complete if their parents
also
 raised them with a great way to conquer the world.
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