Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, some individuals consider that

history

is one of the best ways to learn on educational platforms.

On the other hand

, others think that these days science and

technology

are more important than story. From my point of view,

history

is more significant than others and in

this

essay, I will discuss both views,support them with some examples and give my own opinion.

Firstly

history

is the best way for a past generation to transfer their experience to new nations.

Scientists

have spent years to understand the meaning of ancient people's stories like Babylon

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because they believe that can learn lots of valuable information ,

furthermore

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they can teach the younger generation through universities.

For example

, the Oslo library gives a 20% discount to individuals who decide to study story books, so teachers consider that reading

history

notes has increased society's knowledge.

On the other hand

, because of

the

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recent

technology

like the

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internet

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some people think that science and

technology

have more impact than

history

. In that way,

scientists

have used them to research issues sensitive to the past.

For instance

, David Rose was the first person who invested in our earth and space,

moreover

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he wrote 100 hundred books, but now because of recent giants not only do researchers

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the space deeply but they

also

don't accept Rose's past theories about our earth.

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this

century

scientists

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the past

generation

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data. In conclusion, histories have significant information from past nations, so studying the books related to them is very important. But on the opposite regarding

technology

scientists

have new views about

history

therefore

they don't want to spend their time to understand the old stories.

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significance
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legacy
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breakthroughs
sustain
sustainability
revolutions
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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Task 2: Some people think that good health is very important to every person, so medical services should not be run by profit-making companies. Do the advantages of private health care outweigh the disadvantages?

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