In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Previously, in the time of our ancestors performing agricultural activities on
large
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scale was very difficult
due to
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of
technology
.
However
, nowadays we have
technology
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the technology
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and in the
past
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we were able to produce 10 potatoes in a month now the same product can be produced 50 times more with the help of new
technology
. We still see in many regions a lot of people dying of hunger. In
this
essay, I will explain the reason behind
this
and will
also
give
solution
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for it.
To begin
with, we see that with the rise in
technology
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there is
also
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in population as well. And
due to
this
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the resources obtained through agriculture are not sufficient.
For instance
, In Pakistan, yearly around many tonnes of food is produced and
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exported
in
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whole
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world from where it is sold to individuals.
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due to
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population
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everyone
do
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not get
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food and
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the majority
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of them are left hungry.
Furthermore
, if we look at its solution, for people who suffer from poverty, the government should make
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and give them two times food there for free.
For example
,
China
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population is the highest in the world, yet nobody stays hungry.
This
is because they do not waste even a single drop of water and always store and share it.
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, ending
this
appetite problem forever is impossible.
Nevertheless
, we shouldn’t stop trying and help others as much as we can, never make them feel alone, always stand by their sides and no matter the situation is we share and care for them. Like the elders say “Sharing is caring”.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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