In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Previously, in the time of our ancestors performing agricultural activities on

large

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scale was very difficult

due to

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technology

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, nowadays we have

technology

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and in the

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we were able to produce 10 potatoes in a month now the same product can be produced 50 times more with the help of new

technology

. We still see in many regions a lot of people dying of hunger. In

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essay, I will explain the reason behind

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give

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for it.

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with, we see that with the rise in

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there is

also

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in population as well. And

due to

this

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the resources obtained through agriculture are not sufficient.

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, In Pakistan, yearly around many tonnes of food is produced and

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exported

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whole

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world from where it is sold to individuals.

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due to

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population

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everyone

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not get

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food and

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of them are left hungry.

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, if we look at its solution, for people who suffer from poverty, the government should make

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and give them two times food there for free.

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China

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population is the highest in the world, yet nobody stays hungry.

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is because they do not waste even a single drop of water and always store and share it.

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, ending

this

appetite problem forever is impossible.

Nevertheless

, we shouldn’t stop trying and help others as much as we can, never make them feel alone, always stand by their sides and no matter the situation is we share and care for them. Like the elders say “Sharing is caring”.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

270 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

inequality
distribution
access to resources
climate change
natural disasters
political factors
economic factors
agricultural practices
infrastructure
transportation
population growth
education
knowledge
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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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