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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday -Describe some possible disadvantages -Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Jeanne, Hi! How are you? Guess what? I received your letter that you asked for some advice. Of course, I will help you! I have a lot of experience in camping and I’m happy you asked me!
First,
no doubt, you will enjoy camping. You will discover real life, people are so friendly, everyone talks to each other and lives with nature, fishing, and making fire camp in the evening! You can add marshmallows, you will love it! Well, you have to know that camping has some disadvantages,
such
 as sleeping in a tent during a cold night without a mattress! And you can forget all the devices, but it is probably peace and quiet you want to find, isn’t it? Anyway, when I read your letter, you made me want to come so much! I really want to come with you next summer, we could do it together? What do you think about
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hiking on our next camping trip? Let me know if you are keen to go together. Can’t wait to see you, take care, see you soon Cheers, Tony
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task response advice
The letter adequately responds to the task and provides relevant information regarding the advantages and disadvantages of camping. It would be beneficial to address all the points outlined in the prompt with more depth and clarity.
coherence and cohesion advice
The logical flow of ideas is apparent, but there are areas where the coherence and cohesion can be improved. Specifically, the greeting and closing could be more formal and the ideas within each paragraph could be linked more effectively to create a smoother transition between them.
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