A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday -Describe some possible disadvantages -Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Jeanne, Hi! How are you? Guess what? I received your letter that you asked for some advice. Of course, I will help you! I have a lot of experience in camping and I’m happy you asked me!

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no doubt, you will enjoy camping. You will discover real life, people are so friendly, everyone talks to each other and lives with nature, fishing, and making fire camp in the evening! You can add marshmallows, you will love it! Well, you have to know that camping has some disadvantages,

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as sleeping in a tent during a cold night without a mattress! And you can forget all the devices, but it is probably peace and quiet you want to find, isn’t it? Anyway, when I read your letter, you made me want to come so much! I really want to come with you next summer, we could do it together? What do you think about

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hiking on our next camping trip? Let me know if you are keen to go together. Can’t wait to see you, take care, see you soon Cheers, Tony

Submitted by tony.vantroo on Sat Sep 02 2023

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The letter adequately responds to the task and provides relevant information regarding the advantages and disadvantages of camping. It would be beneficial to address all the points outlined in the prompt with more depth and clarity.

coherence and cohesion advice

The logical flow of ideas is apparent, but there are areas where the coherence and cohesion can be improved. Specifically, the greeting and closing could be more formal and the ideas within each paragraph could be linked more effectively to create a smoother transition between them.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

185 words

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