Unhealthy food has negative effect on both individuals and on the society they live in. Some people think that the government should tax the unhealthy food while others say that fat tax is unfair an unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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source for people can have a good background in mental health, which means we should choose to use healthy

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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public health policy
lifestyle diseases
obesity
cardiovascular diseases
diabetes
sin tax
regressive taxation
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consumer behavior
economic burden
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nutritional education
health promotion
subsidies
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Unhealthy food has negative effect on both individuals and on the society they live in. Some people think that the government should tax the unhealthy food while others say that fat tax is unfair an unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

Some people think that detailed criminal description on newspapers and TV programs has bad consequence, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree?

Farmers within a country are often protected by tariffs - that is, special taxes on imported food. Such policies are necessary, and should be implemented wherever possible. To what extent do you agree with this?