These days, some schools do not have enough money to pay for all the programs that they think are necessary for their students. As a result, some schools are considering allowing advertisements in their buildings. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not?

In our contemporary
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society
, some of the academic places, like
schools
, cannot
affoard
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afford
the budget that they should consist for their educators. In order to
that
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, they prefer to show various types of
advertisement
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advertisements
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in
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on
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their property.
While
showing
advertisements
would be a good solution for gaining
big
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amount of money to spend
for
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children, I personally believe that it is not an appropriate idea to promote the
infrastuctures
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infrastructures
infrastructure
and facilities of an academic
place
. Supporters of advertising in the
schools
' buildings are of the opinion that some special
schools
should accept specific
advertisements
to show in their buildings or on a
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billboard
in
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outsider
place
.
For example
, public and
govermental
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governmental
government
schools
have not taken any money for
student's
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student
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registration. In that case, if the
schools
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owner wanted to
afoard
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avoid
the
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unpridectable
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unpredictable
expenditures, they should take some
advertisements
.
Additionally
, parents and teachers argue that these kinds of
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must be related to the
students
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lessons,
such
as a brand of practical books for mathematics and science.
On the other hand
, accepting
advertisements
can
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the
schools
away from their main goals. To be more specific, providing that an academic
place
gain
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financial support from non-academical sources, it could
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to
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a business care company, rather than an educational one. A
schools'
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main goal
have
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to be
provoding
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providing
a
place
with all of the verbal and non-verbal facilities,
such
as smart computer systems, sport lands and desirable teachers.
Therefore
, When
schools
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owners and in-charged individuals
prioratize
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prioritise
financial subjects
to
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their students, they might forget their
vitalvresponsibilities
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vital responsibilities
. In conclusion,
advertisements
can be considered as a solution to solve the
financilal
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financial
complications for public and governmental
schools
to overcome their obstacles and provide some new programs and infrastructures for their students.
However
, the first priority of
schools'
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owners should be their children and their desires, not business.
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