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Female are better student than male. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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There are many beliefs that female
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 better than male when it
come
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comes
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 to studying,
while
 other think
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. In the writer's opinion, female students are
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 in studying than
male
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males
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 because of their haute
disipline
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discipline
. It must be understood that females are more
self - aware
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 their ability.
This
 is
due to
female
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females
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 fully
comprehene
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comprehend
comprehensive
comprehended
themself both
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their
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strength
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strengths
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 and
weakness
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weaknesses
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.
As a result
,
female
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females
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 develop and make the most of their potential to achieve
success
, simultaneously, they fix and
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improve their weakness through learning progress. From the writer's experience, female students tend to have the best
score
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scores
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 at school
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because
 of
self awareness
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 and the
abilty
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ability
 to learn from mistakes.
Thus
, female  
self - aware
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self-aware
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 and improve to become
better
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a better
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 version.
However
, there are some people
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who argue
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 that most prominent world
figure
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figures
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 are men. To put it planly, male can
develp
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develop
 their talent
one
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in one
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 specific area and use all concentration
also
 passion for that
filed
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field
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, especially research and analysis subjects.
Hence
,
male
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males
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 may
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preceived
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perceived
 as leaders and
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quite
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succes
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successful
 in one field.
This
 point may be true but
male
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males
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 just spend
thier
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their
 focus on a specific subject
while
female
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females
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 concentrate
all
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on all
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field
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fields
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 equally.
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 the writer's perspective,
female
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females
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 really appreciate
discipline
 in work and study. To explain in
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further
 detail,
female
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females
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 can control themself from
procrastinations
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procrastinating
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 and manage time effectively. In
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, they
priotize
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prioritise
 their studies above distractions,
push
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and push
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 themself
into
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to
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high
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a high
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 level of
discipline
 to
achive
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achieve
goal
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goals
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.
For example
, a
femal
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female
 student who
have
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has
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 a
part time
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part-time
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 job after school still
maitain
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maintain
maintains
 a high GPA because of her
discipline
in
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at
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 work and
strict
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strictness
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 with
herslf
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herself
.
Therefore
, the
abilty
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ability
of
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to
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discipline
help
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helps
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 female
success
. In conclusion,
although
 most
of
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apply
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male
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males
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achive
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achieve
goal
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goals
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 in a specific area, female have
a
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greater
success
overall
 because they
self-
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are
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aware
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their
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 ability and have
discipline
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disciplined
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habit
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habits
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 in work.
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