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The chart below shows the proportions of the world's oil resource held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of the world's oil resource held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart depicts the proportions of the global
oil
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resources
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 occupied in 10 different regions and the
oil
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 consumption share yearly in the same regions. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,
while
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 East holds the largest amount of
oil
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resources
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,
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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 have the smallest percentages.
Moreover
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, Asia and the United States are the
world
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's main
oil
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 consumers
whereas
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Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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 consume the least. As can be inferred from the chart, it is evident that the area holding the most
oil
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resources
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 is
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 East, with 56.52%, over
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half of total
world
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oil
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 sources. When it comes to
oil
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 consumption each year, the amount of
oil
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 Asia and the US consume is far less than the
oil
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 sources they hold. The percentages of
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 consumption
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 the US and Asia are 25.48% and 26.21%, respectively. They are the biggest
oil
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 consumer in the
world
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. In terms of
oil
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resources
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,
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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 are the areas with the
least
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lowest
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 percentages, followed by Western Europe
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the United States and other countries, making up a small proportion
under
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of under
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 2%.
In addition
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, only 1.31% of
oil
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 is consumed by
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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 every year, making them the
world
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's smallest
oil
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 consumers.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, resources, australia, zealand, world with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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