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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In today's age and time, a plethora of inventions in technology have ideally shifted humankind to a modern way of communicating. A film or photograph is generally
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 by
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 to capture
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moments. Bygone societies used to believe in the written word for connecting, but the times have changed significantly. I agree with the above-mentioned notion, and a concrete answer is given below in subsequent paragraphs. In the mid-19th century, before the omnipresence of technical gadgets,
people
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 used to express their thoughts through writing. To commence with, letters and books were considered the ultimate sources to connect with the world and gain knowledge
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, with the launch of cameras and mobile phones, their demand skyrocketed among humans. Sales of handwritten books declined at an increasing rate. These handy gadgets offered the generation a game-changing trend, and
people
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 started adopting it. The idea of capturing a photo became more popular. Illustrating a
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 example, my grandfather
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 was a solo
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, used to write about his everyday travel and thoughts in a book as he had no other substitute
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, in the 20th century, lives have been simplified by these gadgets As the cameras became more and more famous, the demand for films and cinemas proliferated in society. Producers started producing movies in different genres. Not only
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, but social media has influenced youth in a number of ways.
People
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 now express their feelings through posts and videos on "Instagram".
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, photographers are hired on special occasions. To illustrate,
people
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 in earlier times used to give speeches and express how they felt about the groom and bride. Now, post-anniversary shoots and films are made and displayed for the guests.
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, the fact that the lives of humans have been simplified by the advent of cameras and mobiles can not be denied.
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 they are a great invention, the interest and knowledge that written words demonstrate should not be overlooked.

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task response
Be clear on how much you agree. Say your view in the intro and again in the end. Give a short reason for your view.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph. Use a simple order: old way, then new way, then end. Use clear link words.
examples
Use real examples that fit each idea. Add one or two strong facts or stories that fit your point.
grammar/style
Keep lines short. Use simple words. Avoid long and hard sentences.
content
Clear stance shown early in the essay
structure
Intro and conclusion are present
examples
Some good examples used (grandfather, Instagram)

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Visual communication
  • Emotional impact
  • Transcend language barriers
  • Universality
  • Infographic
  • Memory retention
  • Misinterpretation
  • Manipulation
  • Complementary
  • Evocative
  • Multimedia
  • Contextual understanding
  • Ambiguity
  • Visual literacy
  • Instant communication
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