The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
The table illustrates five categories of
vehicles
in Australia and their registered amount in 2010, 2012 and 2014 respectively. The table also
shows the percentage change
of all vehicles
from 2010 to 2014 in the last
column.
The first type of vehicle is passenger vehicles
which stands the second amount. It started at 11800000 in 2010, increased to 12700000 in 2012 and ended at 13000000. Meanwhile, the percent change
is 10.2%. Commercial vehicles
were the most in all years and gradually increased. They are 2.3, 2.6 and 2.7 million respectively. The difference is 17.4%.
Motorcycles had the biggest change
which was 30.8%. The final number ended at 709000. Heavy trucks
and light trucks
are both lower than 50000 at all times and they finished at 416000 and 131000 respectively. The differences are 8.3% and 23.5%.
In conclusion, commercial cars were the most.
Correct word choice
popular.
In contrast
, light trucks
as the least. Motorcycles had the greatest increase and heavy trucks
had the least change
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