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Children have more and more tests and exams to do at school, sometime starting until the age of five or six, right up until the age of eighteen. What are the advantages and disadvantages of making childern do exams?

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Nowadays,
exams
 are an immense pressure for everyone. For many people, it is a substantial barrier to overcome and go ahead in their careers and life.
However
, there are both pros and cons to deciding to do
this
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some reasons why having plenty of
exams
 could be beneficial and some of the challenges to be overcome. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of facing tests. One of the main positives is children can improve their problem-solving ability at the earlier stage of life, which can be useful in the future. What I mean by
this
 is that undertaking assessments may lead us to work
according to
 the time, manage time, and conduct surveys or research on the relevant topic, which can be the reason for the huge revolution.
Secondly
, it improves and helps to gain knowledge. To be more precise, in an office to get a job promotion it is compulsory to complete an exam and
also
 in schools, to upgrade to a new class students ought to
face
 an evaluation. In
this
 case, studying the subject is essential to achieve our dream.
Thus
, we should learn something to attend the trial which can increase our general knowledge. Turning to the other side of the argument, the primary cons of
this
 problem is, that it may increase the mind pressure and frustration. Nowadays, even elementary school children have to
face
 lots of
exams
 which can cause irritation in their studies. Some adults too
face
 lots of troubles because of the trials as it is very tough and creates competition among people.
For example
, in my personal experience, there is a doctor in my hometown who is very talented in complex operations. To go ahead in his field he needs to
face
 a foreign examination, which he had failed several times.
On the other hand
, his peer doctor who is less qualified and experienced than him did the same exam and passed it.
Thus
,
exams
 could be a big barrier which could affect our lifestyle in several ways. To sum it up, you need to weigh up the pros of problem-solving ability and gaining knowledge and the cons of lack of headspace and increasing pressure before making a decision. Personally, I believe the benefits of the problem eventually outweigh the negatives.
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task response
Ensure that all main points are supported with relevant examples and explanations. This will strengthen the argument and provide a comprehensive response to the task question.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing ideas in a more logical and cohesive manner. Use linking words and transition phrases to connect ideas and create a smoother flow of information.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • assessment
  • systematic
  • evaluate
  • mastery
  • subject matter
  • preparation
  • academic
  • professional
  • frequent
  • disipline
  • time management
  • learning gaps
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • mental health
  • memorization
  • creativity
  • socio-economic
  • disparities
  • disadvantaged
  • resources
  • inequality
  • intrinsic motivation
  • joyful pursuit
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