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some people believe that if a child commits a crime, they should be punished while others think it is the child's parent who should be punished.

#people #child #crime #parent
It is argued that punishments should be applied
for
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 kids who have
commited
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committed
 the crimes rather than the
parent
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parents
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. It is the opinion of
this
 writer that
child
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children
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 who cause crimes should be punished rather than the opposed view. It must be acknowledged that
child
 who
commit
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 a crime have to be punished for their actions as a warning for them. So that they would not re-offend the actions which had happened.
As a
result
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 the
child
 who was punished for their crime will learn that the things they have caused
is
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 prohibited and the
child
 will
also
 take the punishments as a warning which will make them
have
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think about
consequences
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the consequences
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 before
the
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they
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 do
anythings
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.
Thus
, if a
child
commit
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 a crime
thay
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they
 have to be punished for it. Despite these, many people

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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