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The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart below compares the
quantity
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number
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 of dwellings constructed per
year
 in
Derby
 and
Nottingham
 from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
, the
number
 of houses built in
Derby
 plateaued twice over the time period. The first
plareau
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plateau
occured
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occurred
 from 2000 to 2001 and the second time kept for five years between 2003 and 2007. One
year
 later, the quantity of lodgements constructed in
Derby
 skyrocketed and reached a peak
at
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in
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 2009.
By contrast
, the quantity of housing built in
Nottingham
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
 during the decade.
According to
 the information shown
it
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in
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 the graph, both cities experienced the most productive
year
at
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in
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 2009,
which
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when
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 the
amount
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number
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 of dwellings
constructured
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constructed
 in
Derby
 peaked at almost 350 and the amount of that in
Nottingham
 peaked at 250.
Besides
 the aforementioned, the first plateau happened in
Derby
 stuck in the
number
 around 40 and the second one remained in the amount around 110. At the other end of the spectrum, the account of houses built in
Nottingham
 per
year
 witnessed a
flactuation
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fluctuation
 with the lowest
number
about
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of about
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 10 and the highest
number
 of 250.
To sum up
,
although
 the
number
 of housing
constructured
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constructed
 in
Derby
 exhibited a plateau for two times , it never
decread
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decreased
decreed
 over the period, whilst the account of that in
Nottingham
 had a relatively unsteady tendency during the same period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, derby, nottingham, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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