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The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visited different museums in London.

The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visited different museums in London.
The provided bar chart depicts the proportion of citizens who visited four chief museums in London from June to December. Upon initial observation, it is clear from the graph that all of them have a quarter of a million
visiters expect
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visitors except
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 the National Museum has less than.
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 what is given,
the
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in the
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 first two months, the
overall
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 sum of tourists did not really show any major changes.
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, August has the greatest number of citizens, starting from just under 400
thousand
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 people in the National Museum and reaching
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the maximum point of just over 700
thousand
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 folks in the History Building.
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, during the month of September, all the data figures fluctuated, to illustrate, History, British and National museums followed a downward trend by decreasing over 100
thousand
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 people,
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, science indicated a significant growth by going up 25
percent
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,
as well as
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 the December, where History and British fields had the same changes of falling
of
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a
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100
thousand
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 people,
nevertheless
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, national Museum remained almost the same.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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