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the graph below shows the annual visitor to new zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.

the graph below shows the annual visitor to new zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.
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The given graph illustrates the annual visitor to New
Zealand
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 from 5 different countries between the
years
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 1996 to 2014.
Overall
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, the most tourists have come from Australia and stayed constant all over the
years
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, New
Zealand
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 having the most visitors from Australia,despite that USA
also
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 started to increase their visits to New
Zealand
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 slightly over the
years
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.
Furthermore
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, China is placed on the lowest
due to
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 the lack of visitors from China. New
Zealand
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 in 2005 had the most
expenditures
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, over 2,500 and that only from Australian visitors , which are the first on the graph,
also
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 USA showed an increase in visiting New
Zealand
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 in 2010 with a number of over 1,500
expenditures
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. UK,
also
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 had a slight increase over the
years
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, between the
years
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 2008 respectively 2012 it stayed constant at 1000
expenditures
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,
while
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 China had the lowest
expenditures
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 all over the
years
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 staying around 500
expenditures
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 remaining the
last
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 country on the list.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, years, expenditures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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