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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not tought, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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Nowadays a wide range of students focuses on developing their
English
than
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local
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their local
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languages
,
while
 some
people
 seek to keep their local
languages
 strong. Personally, I believe that learning
English
 is more crucial than local
languages
. I feel that for two reasons which I will discuss in the
folowing
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following
 essay. I firmly believe that, students in the new generations as teenagers ought to concentrate more on learning
English
, because, it has a high demand widely.
Hence
,
people
 can work in any place in the world if they have strong
English
 speaking, writing, listening and reading.
For example
, in Asia or Arabic Countries
such
 as Saudi Arabia, you can work in
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the tourism
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section
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sector
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 and in international companies, merely with your
English
 certificate or an
English
 interview.
On the other hand
, most countries opt to teach the mother
language
then
 the second one,
such
 as
English
, to keep their nations bilingual.
Additionally
, the rate of
people
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who
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 speak
english
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English
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 increasing year by year,but,
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it its
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its
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it's
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suitably
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 to maintain that as a first langue, to be taught
from
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in
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the
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apply
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preschool.
For example
, in Germany,
people
 focus on
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the german
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german
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German
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language
 but when the Britain tousim come to german the employer needs to speak
english
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English
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.
To Conclude
, it is frequently said that,
citizen
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citizens
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 of any country should
to
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apply
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study
English
 as a second
language
. Because, the international market requires
English
 in your CV,
Instead
 of that, the whole world ought to learn local
languages
 as a first
language
. Personally, I believe that are supports my point of view.
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Ensure a clearer argument and support it with specific examples
coherence cohesion
Improve the organization of ideas and use linking words to connect them
lexical resource
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Work on sentence structure, grammar, and verb tenses
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